My first storytelling. What you think?

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Riding through the city that never sleeps always hearing police sirens, car horns, and impudence of people through the city streets; construction crews working on a corporate facility was diverted by six-teen fecility LEDs lights that transpired beautifully.

There was an officer on eight hundred block, west of Manhattan, flatteringly across his motor cycle bike, when he heard something like horses on a Kentucky derby, when the sound grew louder, it was the dual exhaust laconically in his ears.

Cruising across Brooklyn bridge, luxuriating in style, while the tehama aniline leather was urbane, I seen a little boy mused over the big, 22 inches wheels that discern his attention. As I approached the city of Brooklyn, the 6.2L was impregnable for a quarter tank near the E line on my gauge. Still there was fifth-teen miles to drive until I reach my destination.

As I drove to fifth avenue on 100 block, there was a preacher praying to god, as I pressed the gas pedal and the 403 hp growl a little, he was very passionated about the vehement sound, just like his bystander about his prayers to god.

As I approached my destination, there was a group of kids standing next to my driveway, and a clever kid said, that's a sweet, macho ride you have! Explicitly expressed. It must feel good to live in a city that never understated, and to drive a Cadillac Escalade Platinum! The little replied with a smile as he walked away.

Answer
I don't want to be hyper-critical, but your skills need some honing. Using words properly is very important to the reader understanding your intent, your meaning. Having said that, your story has merit, just too many words. Verbosity is the enemy of clarity, and can cause your reader to be confused as to the meaning and flow of the story.
Try to see your character entering the city, in whatever vehicle you want, and going to a specific place that you are aware of, and get him there with as few extra words as you can..... Then re-read it until you are satisfied that it cannot be misunderstood, or your reader will lose interest.

Good luck, and keep writing..... I want to see the story....

What's the difference between a 20inch bike?

Danny

What's the difference between a 20inch bike and a bmx i don't understand. My dad says not to pick out a little kid bike which what i would imagine is a bike with flowers power rangers and those velcrole pads. so i pick out this really cool bike its 20 inch me dad gets mad and says your an idioit thats a little kid bike gets mad at me and says why do u want a 20inch bike. i say to do tricks. now he wants me to buy a bike that has all this gears and is so uncomfertable for lower area and is really tall. he says i need to grow up or some **** and stuff.
he says those are bmx bikes and those u cant afford. ok i cant afford the bmx so whats the diffence is a 20inch bike that bad??

Answer
Exactly what he said!!!

it all depends on how tall you are if you looking for a BMX bike

If your are around 5'5 like me you will want a 20' or 20'5 inch bike
they also make and 18inch for smaller riders

if you are taller than go with an 20'5 or an 20'75 bike (make sure you get the right size. It will help with the back problems later)
and that's measured in top tube not tire

any one of those bikes above should have at least 22 to 24inch tires

but almost any bike measured like that will usually be pretty expensive unless you pick on off ebay or buy it used

but also if you are really going to be getting into BMX the I suggest you figure out where you will be riding this park, trail, and park or all three

those are just some things you should think about for a first bike if you are going to be getting into BMX


hope I helped

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