How does this sound as a rental cover letter?

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Chris M

We recently toured an apartment we really like, however we recently had to short sale our home to move out of state for work. It was suggested that we write a cover letter. Please let me know if this sounds ok without sounding desperate (I've taken out info such as town, names, etc for privacy):

Thank you for taking the time to allow us to view your lovely townhome at XXX America Street in Certain City, USA. We have been searching for quite awhile for the perfect three bedroom in Certain City, and feel that we would very happy in the one you are offering. Along with this letter, please find our completed applications and current pay stubs. Since applications can give a very generic overview of possible tenants, please allow us to tell you a bit more about our family:

We are a family of five who recently made a big move to Second State from First State! Ryan graduated from Big University in the spring of last year with a degree in elementary education and, with the job market not being so great, decided to apply for positions out of state as well as in state. He ended up landing a job at Awesome Elementary in Certain City and we packed our belongings and moved up here in July of last year. Our intention was to settle in Certain City, however we were very limited in our time and choices when selecting our first apartment and ended up in Another City. We like Another City, however we still wish to be in Certain City. With Ryan working in the Certain City community and Sophia working in A Closeby Town, we feel it would limit our commute time and allow us to gain more family time. It will also be convenient to be closer to the commuter rail as Ryan will be starting his masterâs program at Another University this summer. With our current lease coming to an end, we feel this is the perfect time to move into the city and community weâve grown to love in the past year.

As previous homeowners, you can be assured that we will respect and care for your home as if it were our own. Being a very active family, we also feel that your location is perfect for us, being in close proximity downtown and also on a street that we feel comfortable allowing the kids to ride bikes on.

We also wanted to point out a few things from our application. Sophia is a kitchen designer currently working part time. As of June, she will be going full time and her income will increase to $900/week. If needed, we can provide a letter from her boss stating this. We also wanted to point out the fact that we recently had to short sale our home in First State. With the amount of foreclosures in our area, our home depreciated in value almost $100,000 and it was a last option for us to sell to move up here for Ryanâs career. Please know that, while we realize this may be a red flag, we have never been late on our rent and could provide proof of that. We would also be willing to give a security deposit or pay a little more per month in rent to make you feel more comfortable with us. We really love your home and would be willing to discuss any possible ideas and hope that you will find us to be suitable candidates for your beautiful unit.

Thank you for your consideration,
(our names)
The last paragraph is included because the short sale has affected our credit, and they will see it on our report, so we'd like to address it beforehand. It is saying that, in spite of the short sale, we can afford the rent and would be willing to pay an additional deposit to ease their minds. We also wanted to explain the situation a bit - we didn't short sale because we could no longer afford the home, we HAD to sell the home due to moving out of state for a job and after it being on the market for a year, had to go to a short sale to be done with it.

Answer
That last paragraph of yours is a red flag paragraph.

You sound as though you need to convince them that you can afford their rent, which suggests that perhaps you can't.

Sorry, but it doesn't work for me - there's a 'fakeness' about it.

What kind of bike do i need for a hilly neighborhood?

Iam Cherry

I live in a neighborhood with a lot of different sizes of hills (small, steelp, in between) and i want to get a biike that is good for just riding around the neighborhood and can go up and down the hills. i also prefer a bike with brakes on the handles. as for gears, i know nothing about( where they are, what its used for, or what they even do and if it will serve any kind of purpose to me) im not a PRO biker and im not trying to be and i dont plan on riding every single day ( maybe 3-4 times a week). i just want to ride it to simply travel around the neighborhood. the sidewalks are really smooth as well if that helps. and theres a lot of turns. so based on all thaat, what kind of bike should i get?

Answer
Number 1 rule...stay OFF sidewalks! Sidewalks are for pedestrians. Streets are for "VEHICLES" - such as the bicycle. Little kids learn how to ride on sidewalks. R U still a little kid? In many parts of the country it's highly ILLEGAL to ride on sidewalks, i.e. Chicago, Manhattan Borough of New York, any business district in St. Louis, etc.

You NEED something like a hybrid or pure road bike. As you are a newbie, I'd go with a hybrid. Bicycle gears are EASY to comprehend. On a typical 21 or 24 speed bike, you have a triple crankset up front & either 7 or 8 gears on the rear cog.

1st gear up front is used for uphill climbs & slow conditions. On the rear, use ONLY gears 1 through 4 while in 1st gear up front.

2nd gear up front is the one most used for flat terrain & rolling hills. Use any of the 7 rear gears. Or on an 8 speed cassette - use gears 2 through 7.

3rd gear up front is for very fast or downhill conditions. Use ONLY gears 4 through 7 on a 7 speed cog & only gears 5 through 8 on an 8 speed cassette.

Why? This prevents "cross chaining" the bike - putting too much lateral (side-to-side) stress on the chain, gears & derailleurs.

G.T.A.B.S. Means Go To A Bicycle Shop - where test riding a bike before the sale is both FREE & ENCOURAGED. Avoid discount stores at all cost. Minimum wage "associates" who know nothing & can't even assemble a bike correctly. Start looking at bikes like a Raleigh Cadent FT1 (man) or an Alysa FT1 (woman).
http://www.raleighusa.com/bikes/fitness/cadent-ft1-13/
http://www.raleighusa.com/bikes/fitness/alysa-ft1-13/

Add a rear rack & either a trunk bag or panniers (saddle bags) and you have a nice "commuter bicycle". http://s382.photobucket.com/user/OldHippie_01/media/2013%20Raleigh%20Cadent%20FT1/100_0364.jpg.html?sort=3&o=0

See additional links...
http://sheldonbrown.com/gears.html
http://www.bikexprt.com/streetsmarts/usa/
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZFjCza5e1kw
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rU4nKKq02BU

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